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Building Better Songs

Building Better Songs

When you know the story of your song, the emotional journey in your song, and why your audience wants to hear you… you can play to these strengths and write and perform better songs….


One response from last week’s email stuck with me. Rebecca Rydell wrote in that… among some things she was working on, she has “difficulty editing songs when they’re done.”


She finishes her songs, you can hear them here… and see what else she’s up to, here:


She was alluding to something that anyone who’s ever written a song, can relate to… your finally finish the song, at least the latest draft…. You know it’s good but it’s not great yet. There’s something missing, something to improve, it’s something you can’t quite figure out. The song is almost done but there’s something not quite there… there’s still a “what’s missing” or “it’s almost what I imagined, but….”


I replied with some advice, but the question kept irritating me (in a good way)… and I kept thinking about it….


How do you edit a song that you’ve “finished”?

It’s a tough one to tackle without hearing a specific song, so I turned the problem around.


How do you minimize the editing you song needs?

I’m taking this on by checking the big picture first. This is how I deal with it… I ask and answer this question early in the songwriting process, usually before the first song section is finished.


What’s the point of the song?

More specifically, I break it into three questions:

  • What’s the story?

  • What’s the emotional journey?

  • WIIFM (What’s In It For Me?) Why should your audience listen to the song?


I will explain each question in more detail and use two of my songs, Emoji Girl and Exotic Bean, as musical examples.


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What’s The Story?

Humans are captivated by stories. We love to organize events into beginning, middle and end. Stories have been around as long as humans gathered together, since fire was invented if not before….

We tell stories to make sense of the world, through myths.

We tell stories to our friends and family about our day and our lives.

We tell stories to ourselves to explain why we do what we do and why we don’t do what we avoid.


What’s the story in your song?

What happens in your song? It doesn’t need to be a narrative story song to have a story.


There are two stories for any song… the story in the song, the one you’re telling while you write or sing it. The other story is about the song, the inspiration for it, where it came from, the story of how and why the song was written.


The Story In The Song:

A popular song is usually four minutes or less. There isn’t time to wander around or get distracted. There’s time for one story and it has to be short and succinct. If you know what the story is, you can write it more effectively.


Anything, lyric or music, that doesn’t support the story should be cut (save those brilliant lines and rhymes for another song).


I usually outline the story in the song before I have the first section finished. I choose a big idea or title hook, which implies a story and figure out what I want to say and how I intend to tell it.


The Story Of The Song

Is how you wrote it. It can include:

  • The inspiration that sparked it

  • Why you wrote it

  • What happened to you as the songwriter while you wrote it, or

  • The changes that writing the song prompted in you as a songwriter and a person…


Exotic Bean, the story in the song:

I didn’t know I was addicted to premium coffee until I was on vacation and couldn’t find a decent cup for three days. I felt mean without caffeine and couldn’t shake a headache… this is what happened to me.


The story of Exotic Bean:

My wife and I visited a very nice town (that will remain nameless) for the first time. It took us than three days to find a decent cup of coffee. I didn’t think of myself as a coffee snob until I started feeling hungover and irritable. It didn’t matter what I tried, I couldn’t find coffee that satisfied….


Emoji Girl, the story in the song:

The singer is attracted to a woman who more interested in her phone and her social media than in real people.


The story of Emoji Girl:

I imagined myself trying to create a relationship with someone more interested in her phone than other people. A woman that talks in emojis. Instead of preaching about this issue, I wrote this social commentary from inside the situation.


It started when two striking examples of cell phone addiction caught my attention on the same day. The first was a teenager walking across a busy intersection while gazing into his phone, obvious to the traffic around him. The second was a middle aged couple sitting in a restaurant staring at their phones while ignoring each other.


I started writing as I considered their (and my own) addiction to technology and how distracted people are from each other. How likes and social media shares are important indicators of success. Your number of followers is more important than real life friends….



What’s the Story? Action Steps:

You can do this with a “finished” song or better yet, one that you are working on right now.

Explain the story in the song… 3 sentences maximum.

Explain the story behind the song… 1 minute of talking maximum.


Bonus: Tell it on stage or as an introduction to a video post…

I know many songwriters who say a song needs to be able to stand on its own. But I believe that if you prime your audience and give them a framework for the song, a way to understand it… before the even hear it, your audience will pay more attention, remember it better and better understand your message.

Tell the story of the song, or the story about your song before you perform it.


If you’re still trying to pick apart your song, after working out the story in it. Try a gut check… play and sing your song. Investigate any line that feels awkward or boring, then drill deeper into the lyrics, thinking about:

  • What can you cut or change to improve the story?
  • What would make the story even more interesting?

Build a better song with a stronger story in the song!

Build a better rapport with your audience by telling the story of the song!



For more about crafting your own story, or the story of your songs, read Create Your Musical Elevator Pitch

Musical Elevator Pitch, How to introduce yourself to music influencers, Music Publicity Tips


What’s the Emotional Journey?

Music (and all art) is about affecting the emotions of your audience. If a song doesn’t move you emotionally, you won’t listen to it again… it’s elevator music or musical wallpaper. To intentionally misquote Duke Ellington “It don’t mean a thing if it ain’t got a sting!


Any successful song, taps into your emotional state and changes it. The best songs go further and create an emotional journey… there is a progression through more than one emotional state as the song unfolds.

How do the emotions of your characters, and your audience, change during your song?


Don’t write about one emotion, but the interplay of two or more.

Write an emotional story with a journey.


Exotic Bean, Emotional Journey:

The journey is about the physical and emotional distress due to quality coffee withdrawal. Nobody likes to experience discomfort so I balanced it with humor and strong chorus hooks to make it feel good for the listener.


Emoji Girl, Emotional Journey:

The emotional journey follows a relationship from the “singer’s” initial attraction to a woman in the first verse, through their shallow communication in the pre-chorus. In the chorus, he sings of loving an Emoji Girl who is lost in her emoji world. In the second verse he realizes that the relationship isn’t working, and in the bridge he decides that he needs to break up with her.


What’s the Emotional Journey? Action Steps:

  • Explain the emotional journey in your song… one paragraph maximum.

  • What are the emotions that you tap into… what do you want your audience to feel?

  • How can you heighten the emotional content in your lyrics?

  • How can you better support the emotions of the lyrics with your music?


Build a better song with a more dramatic emotional journey!


I haven’t published an article specifically about putting emotions into songs, but these two are about the emotional mindsets of you as a songwriter:


Solving Songwriter Envy: Write better songs by channeling your negative emotions into positive results

Solving Songwriting Envy

Managing Self-Doubt to Write Better Songs: Instead of Sabotaging Yourself


WIIFM (What’s In It For Me)?

What’s in it for your listener? Why should they listen to you or your song?


This is the toughest to answer because your opinion doesn’t matter… only your audience’s opinion matters on this. Whether they are conscious of it or not:

  • It’s what they ask before listening to your music

  • It’s what they ask again any time their attention wanders during your song or your set.


Take control with a live introduction from the stage or in the text before your video in a social media post (see What’s the story? above).


But the listener needs an ongoing answer throughout the song… why should they keep listening?


If you have a goal in mind as you write, this will often take care of itself.

  • Do you want them to hear a message?

  • Feel emotions?

  • Sing with you?

  • Dance like there’s no tomorrow?


Exotic Bean is about human habits…

how you can be uncomfortable when you’re out of your usual routine. The solution in the bridge is plan ahead and take your creature comforts with you if you don’t want to miss out on other good things.


Emoji Girl is social commentary…

I want my audience to hear the message that human interaction is more important than pixels on a screen. It also reminds me to turn off my own phone….


WIIFM? Action Steps

  • Think about you own listening habits… they will be different than those of non-musicians, but stay open to insights.

  • Remember that your audience doesn’t care about your song the way you do. You created it for them… figure out what are they getting from it, don’t just guess.

  • Talk to people… especially your friends and fans. Talk to them live, in person, not just through the internet!

  • Be able to explain your song before you finish it. Don’t assume that it will be instantly understood by everyone.


Build better songs by understanding your audience!


For more about explaining your song to attract more attention on social media, read Get More Social Love For Your Songs

Get More Social Love for your Songs



Know the big idea and the message of your song is before you are deep into the songwriting process.


Know the answers to these questions early in the songwriting process. It will guide you towards a stronger song:

  • What’s the story? 

    • The story in the song
    • The story of the song
  • What’s the emotional journey?

    • How do emotions you evoke change during the song?
  • What’s in it for your audience?

    • When you know why are they listening to you… you can do more of it!


Every line and lyric should support the message you want to share… if a lyric doesn’t help tell the story, change it or cut it!


Most importantly: plan your songs so you don’t have to fix them when you’re finished!



If you song is still stuck in the “almost done phase” here are more articles to help you:


How to Fix a Bad Song, includes some ideas in this article and others to help you keep your song from landing in the trash

How to Fix a Bad Song

Song is Haiku, how to write songs concisely and cut the extra

3 Avoidable Lyric Mistakes and how to correct them

Lyric Mistakes, How to write song lyrics

Let Your Lyrics Breathe to save the song you’re ready to trash…

Let Your Lyrics Breathe

How to Avoid Lyric Fail, when you’re not sure which lyrics to change or what to change them to….



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